Mr. Everyone

Quote: Now I'm a Junior in High School, And take what I say with caution, Because it may change even the hardest of people, And things may never be the ...

now that she brings up the point dragging heels doesnt only make it seem as some1 past out, but maybe isn't to nimble on there feat... =)

some of the ligns/questions are answerable by simple logic... maybe you should state more original and not so predictable questions keep writing and =) happy reading (=

Welcome to the site. I like you poem's theme. you should work on using some more "I" verbs maybe, keep writing =) happy reading(=

Congradulations That is a fine piece of work, probably because each and almost everyone one of us can relate to it. Congradulations again. Keep writing =)happy reading(=

i love the poem, i agree with the pov but i dont like the word "it" at the end of the fourth lign... maybe u should spice it up with ...

i agree with her^ the ditto syllabled ligns get tiring to read after about 6 ligns and the reader is suppose to sort of finish the poem, i like your ...

The poem doesnt make very much sence... Do the narrators switch?

theme was good maybe keep off the conversational tone with this time of poetry and keep the use of the word stuff to a minimal

=) i edited it, ty groink

ty for the critisism =)

wow! sounds like I have to read this book

I found that the pigs didnt have a significant enough role in the allegorical feild for it to be in my book report, sorry for the format my parragraph indentations ...

I think the third and fourth stanzas should be revised, or rewritten, they seem a bit immature and annoying,but overall I like the narration, and I very much enjoyed reading ...

I love the level of seriousness, but I found the ending a bit ironic;it was a good poem but the last stanza doesn't seem like it quite wants to fit...